Miyuki the New Office Lady (fiction, FD/W)

[jlg77]

My first contribution. Let me know what you think.

[Mydnyght Edgeworth]

It wasn't that bad for your first attempt. It had quite a decent lead-in. However, the story ended very abruptly.

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[ooc]After all, Miyuki's accident happened before break time. You failed to explain whether she eventually went home early or spent the rest of her 9-hour workday in her wet skirt or what. How would she get over this incident, or does she at all?[/ooc]
Anyway, as I said, for your first try, it was okay. I suggest against such a sudden ending next time, though.

[jlg77]

True, I should have made it longer.

My inspiration for the story was from Giga/Zeus omorashi videos, by the way.